Exersises - Balance and Movement

Here are some efforts based on Pat Pattison's book Songwriting: Essential Guide to Lyric Form and Structure.

When you see "Original" it is Pat Pattison's original to work from.

Unbalancing- taking away or adding

Original
I wonder who you’re seeing in your dreams
What fantasies you follow in your sleep
I’ll watch beside you till the morning light
While you go chasing shadows through the night

My Turn
I wonder who you’re seeing in your dreams
I’ll watch beside you till the morning light
While you go chasing shadows through the night

I wonder who you’re seeing in your dreams
What fantasies you follow in your sleep
I’ll watch beside you till the morning light
Watching your back; keeping you safe
While you go chasing shadows through the night

Movement – adding a line to vs 2 to move forward (possibly to chorus)

Original
Some girls have the restless touch
Way they hold you lets you know
They’ll get you burning for a while
Start you up and let you go

My Turn
Some girls have the leaving touch
The shiver of pleasure is short
They’ll hold you once and move along
It’s hard to keep ‘em satisfied
Morning comes and soon they’re gone